Cut
I cut my
hair.
Again.
It had been twice during last month.
I’m not sure why I did it.
But I want to.
The change was huge.
And one of my old friends had said she had never seen me like this.
In past ten years.
Maybe I just wanted some changes.
Change what?
Don’t know.
But it’s good to try anything unknown.
And keep a new heart to do everything.
Yeah, sometimes change also made me afraid, too.
But I got the faith.
That everything will be all right.
Just keep your heart going on
And on….
22/ 9/2004
IN K.C.Taiwan
Hi Kena,
I like your
poem and made two minor corrections to it. You might want to think about
not using periods at the end of every sentence, it makes the reading of
your poem have extra pauses and strong stops. Many poems use no
punctuation at the end, and others use commas sparingly.
Yours,
Ed |